Friday, September 5, 2008

When the Moonlight Broke Free...

Orphaned earth, dreaming of the moon,
Yearning, wondering where it went so soon,
Sees a flash, of a sudden, and the coming of dawn,
And a young man walking, on and ever on

There’s light, a lot, but just a promise of the sun,
And he’s walking, alone, as just the one
Of a thousand thoughts he’s keeping company—
A thousand that the night can’t seem to see

He’s lost, he knows not where he goes;
He’s tired, he knows it scarcely shows;
For just as a child, clean and yet to be cheated,
He struggles, to win, he’s never been defeated

It’s getting cold, the wind has a chill
And his snowball grows, rolling up the hill;
Heavier, each moment, and just beginning to see
This climb is steeper than any in memory

He’s being what he’s never been;
He’s seeing what he’s never seen;
It’s not done, not yet, but nor is he;
The end to his story is yet to be

He sweats; he wishes his tears to be lost
And he wishes some way he could melt the frost;
Not that the snow is blinding, but it bleeds
And he hates the pain it newly seeds

It’s a challenge, maybe, a wrinkle on his way,
Much like the moonless morning of a sunless day
When you live the dream, and feel the promise
Of a smiling end to the frown there is

Not all, he knows, can always be right
And not always does he wish for a dawn to the night,
But this once, as he walks, he wishes for more;
He hopes he’s still on that side of the door

And as this happens, as the thoughts transpire,
The earth witnesses the likeness of a fire...
The dream comes true, brings home the promise too;
Memory sparks as memories be, and with a whisper, the moonlight breaks free

6 comments:

Mohit Sinha said...

well i can nw say " i m a fan of his writings" for itz been a habit nw to appreciate his work not only for the vivid styles he comes up with but also because his way of expressing things is very nice..

EsotericPromethean said...

hi ashish
the writing was simple, so appreciable.
but a poem need not span 40 lines.
the central theme feels like diluted.
happy writing.

Waste said...

hey.. thanx for d comment..

i dont really knw wat u perceived as d central theme.. for me, there was none.. its just an expression of something that actually happened..

EsotericPromethean said...

hey, see this is the very problem every writer faces.
writing is not meant for expressing anything...
the thought you consider seems very good, from my point of view; the idea which you mould it into dilutes it, though only by tenths of its beauty; and the style seems to be the major spoiler.
and spoiler would be realtive a term to your work.
see, as an anon. viewer, these comments are unwelcomed, but since you replied, i jst felt like posting it.
one more thing, if you jst write anything, dont forget to give notes to it. T.S. Eliot had more elaborate notes than poems, to prevent any misunderstanding of the authentic thought

happy writng

Waste said...

fully appreciated.. thanx.. n ur comments r ever welcome, anonymous or not..

tho i must say i disagree with the notion that writing is not meant to xpress nethn.. i consider that too cold an approach n i dont think i can ever come around to adopting it..

EsotericPromethean said...

there... you misinterpreted me
i meant writing has a definite purpose( stress on anything). you dont write simply anything.
but always with a purpose.
enjoy blogging.